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the i don't knows
before every thought
describe me better than a sugarcoated
juxtaposition alongside
some simple
split-second similes.

don't you know
how to drop a goddamn subject
before everything comes to some
screeching, jarring
stop?

again?

i would teach you
if i hadn't already put my
past in a
path least taken before me
and my future behind me
in a trail of dripping water
as i watched everyone slip and fall
into it

because if i don't know,
why should you?
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TheWritingDragon Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
ASDFGHJKL THE SOUND CLOUD OF THIS I JUST :faint: it's sooooooo much more personal when it's read :love:
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SpiralingSpontaneity Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ahhh thank you! :la: I was obsessed with reading poems out loud for a while after seeing a few other people do it :giggle:
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TheWritingDragon Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it! :la: I'm listening to another one right now :XD: I'm going to do it with my birdcage one for sure!
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SpiralingSpontaneity Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:love: :huggle: Ahhh I followed you back on SoundCloud! I can't wait to hear it :love::love::love:
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TheWritingDragon Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's coming in a few minutes ;)
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SpiralingSpontaneity Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yay! :squee: I can't wait~ I don't think I've ever heard your voice so I'm really excited! ;)
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TheWritingDragon Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
And I haven't heard yours either :la: so that was cool! :giggle: I hope you enjoy it!!!
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SpiralingSpontaneity Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Squeee this is great :love: I can't wait!! <333
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Choc0Fairy Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013
Its beautiful :) I like it ^^

#LM
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SpiralingSpontaneity Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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orchidshadowfox Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is an intense poem, very much thought-provoking. I love the word choice and the way it flows. Honestly, my only disagreement is not capitalizing 'I' (sorry, I know that's a little nit-picky). Beautiful work my dear. :iconliterarymovement:
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SpiralingSpontaneity Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much <3 I have a habit of not capitalizing in my work, so my apologies, haha <3
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orchidshadowfox Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're most welcome! I think besides the I's, the rest of it works out with not being capped.
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xEmmyx545x Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2013  Hobbyist
This is a lovely and intense poem!! 

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SpiralingSpontaneity Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i'm glad you liked it! <3
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xEmmyx545x Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Hobbyist
:D (Big Grin) 
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is wonderful!:rose:
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