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the rain falls
like the pressing
of keys on a piano,
but the song each drop forms
is less than melodic.

you don't care
whether it falls upon my ears or not.
you don't even care
that it's drowning me,
and that even if you can't,
i recognize its tune.

it isn't one of those cliche,
'indescribable' songs
((it's perfect
with every missed beat
and flat note));
i just don't think
you deserve to understand it.
ugh
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FieryDownpour479 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so lovely! I love how you set the mood with the lines "the rain falls/like the pressing/of keys on a piano". It immediately catches my attention, and it reminds me of this piece I once played on piano called raindrops (I think it was). The way you've strung rain and music together is so flawless. It's beautiful!
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SpiralingSpontaneity Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ohhh thank you so much (: <3 I really appreciate the kind words <3
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FieryDownpour479 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're so very welcome! (:
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cerealnovels Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013
These are my favorite lines in this:

the rain falls
like the pressing 
of keys on a piano,

I had never thought of rain like that before. Interesting image :)


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SpiralingSpontaneity Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much <3
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